Monday, September 30, 2013

Group 1 Mr. Adams and Annabel

 Chris M, Leo W, Shane S, Andrew S

That night, the family left the the bank overjoyed because of the rescue of Agatha.  One person was not so happy about being duped, though, and that was Annabelle's father, Mr. Adams. He was as mad as a raging bull. “Dad, isn’t Ralph such a gentleman?”
“There is no way I will let you marry him,” he blurted out after they arrived home.
“But, Dad, if it weren't for him, Agatha would have suffocated to death in the vault!” stammered the stunned Annabel as tears welled up in her eyes.
“Annabel, he is a criminal. That’s why he had those tools with him,” responded the old man.
“But he is a changed man!
‘’He is being followed dear. That man outside the bank today was a detective who was trying to capture him and to put him in jail.”
Annabel being astounded at her fathers remark ran upstairs to have some privacy in her room. After crying in her room for an hour, she decided to go back to the bank. She wasn’t sure if she should sneak past her dad but she did being unsure if Ralph really was a robber.
Annabel walked up to the bank doors amused of what she saw. It was a note taped to the door from Ralph  that read:
 To my love, Annabel,
I know why you are wondering. It is time that I change my ways to live a new life”. My name is Jimmy Valentine. I was a safe cracker but i know now that I was wrong. Annabel, I’ve changed. I want to live an improved life with you. Will you please marry me? I promise to adapt to our new life.
Love,
Jimmy Valentine.

Annabel looked down the street and saw a shadow. it was jimmy! Annabel ran towards him and gave him a huge hug. jimmy bent down on one knee and asked her one more. "Annabel. Will you marry me'' '' yes i will'' that day Jimmy and Annabel walked off happily.


10 comments:

  1. I liked how you proposed to Annabel

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  2. I like the way you ended the story with Jimmy and Annabel getting married

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  3. Great story! I liked it a lot.

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  4. You forgot to capitalize a few things but overall it was a really good story!

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  5. A few grammatical mistakes but overall it was a very interesting passage.

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  7. I liked the argument by Annabel and her dad. It was really good!

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